What up guys, I need help with making my story more attractive, it's kinda funny but I feel it needs some improvements to make girls more interested, what kind of dhv spikes I should incorporate etc. Here it is
omg thr funniest thing happened to me yesterday, I was at a frat party with my friends just chillin, and at the end when we were about leave my real good friend Jay comes up to me super freaked out, and tells me he got jacked! he shows me that somebody cut his jacket pockets and he cant find his keys and wallet, so we go on a mission to retrieve his stolen goods, couple mins later some guy comes to us and says to Jay – dude you wearing my jacket! – Jay a bit drunk goes on a rant starts saying that it’s bs and it’s his jacket, and how the world is not fair etc, lol, and he goes on like that for like 10min. People gather, im holdinhg him make sure he doesnt do stupid stuff. And then he looks at the pile of coats in the back of tha room, stops and outa nowheresays… oh, there’s my jacket!!! everybody in the room just busting up laughing lol we find his keys and wallet and everybody leaves in a great mood.