I've written 5 dhv stories and was wondering if I could get some feedback for them before I put them into use. I think it would also be good as reference purposes for those who need it.
Thanks in advance, here they are:
1) Protector of loved ones
I just noticed that you have a calm personality (it's like you're not very opinionated [is this a neg or an insult?]/ you seem like you're suffering from mental constipation and can't really think of much to say [with a smile])
I bet that you're really good when it comes to being calm in tough situations.
It reminds me of a time when..something crazy happened when I was escorting my sister to the hospital. My sister usually suffers from severe abdominal pain and she usually has to take the ambulance to the hospital. This time it was urgent and i escorted her to the hospital. As we're moving towards the minibus station her legs start to get weak and she has to lean against me for support. All of a sudden she starts screaming "I cant see anything! Why can't I see anything." I was holding her by her arm and I'm not too sure what's going on but I told her to calm down and that everything shall be alright and then the next minute BANG! She's down on the pavement unable to move. At this moment I decide to calm her down by talking to her, also to ensure that she's conscious. Even though I was a bit scared. I had to protect her. There was this man wheeling an old lady on a wheelchair, he stopped by, asking what's going on. At first seemed he like another passerby concerned about what was happening but as time passed by I could see that he had ulterior motives. I realized that he was checking my sister out and he also said that she was lucky that it was Hong Kong and that it was safe. I tried to fend him off politely but he wouldn't budge. Meanwhile my sister was moaning in pain. Some police officer's arrived and called for an ambulance. I was glad that we got some help and that man was no longer in site.
2) Leader of men + Preselection
I just noticed that you have a smile that reminds me of someone in a public speaking club that I was a part of. Well, I was the President of that club.
Your sense of style reminds me of her as well. It was very odd, through that experience I realized that women are actually more attracted to men with power.
All the president's, John F. Kennedy, Bill Clinton had many lovers. I was surprised that this applied to a president of a community club as well.
Managing the club requires quite a bit of focus and sometimes I have to get my hands dirty and get involved in tasks myself. This girl that i mentioned started asking me out after I took up my post. Sometimes she said that she had to buy something for her Father and needed my advice and other times that she said that she had to talk about club matters. One day as we came back from a club contest I decided to get things sorted out and ask her whether she liked me. She seemed quite nervous and I was nervous too because I didn't really have any feelings for her and I didn't want to date someone that I didn't have feelings for if she said she liked me. She said that she liked me alot but then I had to turn her down for her own good and mine.
You seem like a very patient person, either that or it takes you a long time to think [neg? said with a grin]
That's not a bad quality, I'm sure you'd be very good tutoring children.
That reminds me of a student of mine that I taught at a tutoring service for unprivileged youth. He just came back from Mainland China and his English and Arithmetic was quite poor. He came from a very poor family and didn't have a steady education. He was 11 eleven years old but he didn't know the ABCs or the multiplication table. I felt really disillusioned looking at this student as it was not something that I'd expect in a developed city. Whenever, he'd come to the centre I was determined to see him succeed but more importantly to make him understand that even though he was not a high achiever in class that had nothing to do with his intellectualy capacity. Everytime we met, I'd sit him down and teach him the alphabet and the multiplication table. It was quite strenuous but it was well worth the effort. I once asked him to multiply two figures in the thousands. At first he struggled and he even got the result incorrect several times, but in the end as I pushed him to try again, he finally succeeded. The look on his face when he solved the problem successfully was epic. It was a very rewarding experience knowing that I had a positive impact on this child's life.
Hmmm you have an certain aura around you that conveys a sense of certainty. Let me see your hands [palm read, Kino]. Just what I thought.
You'd be good in the entertainment industry where much of it is required. For instance, you could act as the tree in the background of musicals or even start your own circus.[neg] That would be good.
But did you know that people fear speaking in public more than death itself! I am sort of an entertainer myself. A public speaker to be exact. I once competed in a public speaking contest with more than 100 audience members, I prepared for my speech for more than a dozen times, but once I got on stage my mind went blank. It was a good thing I got my composure again and completed my speech. My speech topic was about servant leadership. Even though I ended up winning the contest, I realized that public speaking is not as scary as it seems after a couple of minutes on stage.
5) Did something with females
Man its hot outside today...Hmmm..that's interesting, you kinda look like some girl that I know of.
Your dress is the same as hers, I haven't seen her for 3 years [neg, stating that he fashion sense is outdated]
She and I went around together went hiking and did many other crazy things together. Your smile really resembles hers as well, when she smiled her smile went up to her eyes. [NLP? association??]
Where are you from?
Oh really, she was from there too, what a coincidence. [NLP? association??] She was interested in long-term relationships and kept talking to me about getting married, even though we weren't in a relationship together. She used to tell me of her ideal home, when she wanted us to get married, it was crazy, I hope you're not like that. [get her to jump through some hoops, get her to qualify herself.]