Might want to think about rereading that text. Hopefully it works out, but IMO it sounds like you're calling her a man, that she's not girly enough. You want to neg her, but you also kind of need to compliment her at the same time your dissing her. Just be subtle with your approach like that.
Like Fuser said, if you can throw in the sexual innuendos that can be taken sexually or literally it will make her mind think a little bit about the topic more.
IF you really don't care about the outcome you could always try this routine at night when you know she's alone in bed to see if she would be DTF. This would definitely give you your answer if you'll be friendzoned or not. But it depends how much rapport you got with her.
Read through those questions carefully, and if you're ballsy enough to ask that I would do it. I'm 100% because I could pick up on the IOI and the way she texted back and forth. You just need to calibrate to make sure you sound smooth in your transitions.