MESSEGE OPENER

I recently posted this messege to a random girl on facebook

"GIRL YOU SO FINE, I LOVE YOU BABY
I WANT YOU TO BE FOREVER IN MY LIFE, fark YOUR BOYFRIEND!!!
MARRY ME GIRL!!!! FOR REAL!!!

hahahaha

Jusk kidding, I love being a prick
but I truly do enjoy a hot chick
with a personality so sick
that I can quickly click with.

I can tell from your pictures that your hot
but that means nothing to me
like a movie with no plot
I would like to meet you to see
if the whole package is what you got

btw, I'm also trying to become a rapper in case you didn't notice this message rhymed"

It didn't work and I think I know why...The joke was kind of lame and the messege at the bottom it's kind of bragging
So i removed those I should be fine...

Just wondering, what would you do?