Very new to the game. I have a profile that I have slightly refined but it needs help. I am sending out letters to cold HB 8-10's. They read it and then go to my profile. Here is the profile and an example of one of the letters. Don't hold back on me, if it sucks, let me know.

Congratulations on finding the most awesome profile on match! Hear the sirens in the background?

If you've found this profile you've demonstrated a kind of initiative that will make you a success. Give yourself a pat on the back and a silver star.

If you've arrived here because I messaged you then you've taken an important first leap- so that's only a bronze star. You donít get a pat on the back until later.

I know exactly what I want from life and I know how to get it. I'm smart enough to know better, and cute enough to get away with it. I am tired of clubs and Hollywood scene. The empty arm candy just doesn't cut it in my book. I have found what I want to do in life for a career and work hard at it. I hope you are on the same path.

I have a factory making some awesome products, but being in charge all day can make me over authoritative, be forewarned.