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    sidewinder89 is offline PUA Forums Respected Contributor
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    Default New Profile.. not perfect but improved results

    Hi guys,

    Here's my profile its still a bit of a mess and I've taken little bits of inspiration from all over place. I feel its probably too negative though. Any help would be cool.


    Headline: Don't read this... you were warned!

    Well seeing as how you've already ignored my warning I know your slightly naughty and disobedient, I like that .

    Im a laid back guy with a love of movies that sometimes borders on the obsessive. I like most films really but anything with will ferrel or steve carell in are usually amazing. Oh and if you haven't seen it, watch The Shawkshank Redemption...amazing .

    I have or intend to read 50 Shades of Gray... not just because I want to justify my opinion that its probably going to be as crap, if not more so than Twilight, though this will likely be my conclusion. And I'm not going to read it on the train in front of a collection of rightfully disturbed commuters.

    At work, I build time machines, cure cancer, solve world poverty.... and make the tea, we all have our slow days.


    A few words of caution

    Fake tan... girls contrary to popular belief most men don't want to date a tangerine that smells like cat vomit. Apply in moderation if you must...

    Harry Potter... I fail to see the appeal of a specy tw*t on a broomstick, if you regard Daniel Radcliff as "the greatest actor of all time" we may not get on, or if you do insist on liking like him its perfectly acceptable for you to lie to me and simply agree that he is a overpaid oxygen waster with the acting capability of a retarded monkey.

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    Default Re: New Profile.. not perfect but improved results

    Definitely get rid of the "I'm a laid back guy" part!!! (You'll be glad you did!!)

    Also- it's kinda funny & interesting for sure...
    But it's still coming across like you're trying to qualify yourself to the women, and not creating enough mystery, curiosity & intrigue.

    Women need to be able to get some clues about you.. (the real you) so they can build you up in their heads with their imagination.

    Your personality needs to shine through in your profile... but not much more than that.

    Right now, most women are reading the "laid back guy" line & thinking, "I'm Out.. Ok, NEXT!!"

    The humor part is pretty good... but it does sound like bits & pieces of several other profiles mashed together, like you're kinda trying too hard to be funny.

    Women want to "feel" a connection when they read your "about me" section. It's that emotional trigger that makes them respond.

    So, you want to be interesting, as well as funny, & express that there's definitely a lot more to offer, but they're not gonna get it all at this particular minute.



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    Default Re: New Profile.. not perfect but improved results

    Thanks T-Mal, you advice is gold as always.

    Revised to this..

    Well seeing as how you've already ignored my warning I know your slightly naughty and disobedient, I like that ; ).

    I'm a sarcastically charged male with a love of movies that sometimes borders on the obsessive. I like most films really but anything with Will Ferrel or Steve Carell in are usually amazing. Oh and if you haven't seen it, watch The Shawkshank Redemption...thank me later.

    I'm not one to let my job define me but I am proud of it... I know quite the dichotomy (If you know what that word means I'm impressed). During my 8 hour working day, I build time machines, cure cancer, solve world poverty.... and make the tea, we all have our slow days.

    I have or intend to read 50 Shades of Gray... not just because I want to justify my opinion that its probably going to be as crap, if not more so than Twilight, though this will likely be my conclusion. And I'm not going to read it on the train in front of a collection of rightfully disturbed commuters.


    A few words of caution

    Fake tan... girls contrary to popular belief most men don't want to date a tangerine that smells like cat vomit. Apply in moderation if you must...

    Harry Potter... I fail to see the appeal of a specy tw*t on a broomstick, if you regard Daniel Radcliff as "the greatest actor of all time" we may not get on, or if you do insist on liking him its perfectly acceptable for you to lie to me and simply agree that he is an overpaid oxygen waster with the acting capability of a retarded monkey.

    I think I might take out the bit about films though... I think it does convey me a bit better. I am naturally very dry and playfully grouchy

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    FYI- I just sent you a PM...
    I have a couple ideas for you, so holla back.


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