Hey guys,
First of all I have to tell you I am from sweden, which makes my grammer a bit bad so please bear with me and please do read this wall of text.
I am really new to this whole PUA-thing and I am a real rookie regarding online dating. In real life I have no problem getting laid and I can talk to women, far from an expert since the average chick is a HB5 or something(waaay to loow).
Anyhow, started out two months ago using Bad*o (don't know if you heard of it), using exclusively one line, the classical "I married you in my imagination"-thingy. Got 5 numbers from that in 3 days, which I texted 3, 2 replies and 1 went cold the same night.(I am for sh1t regarding texting, better on the phone, best in real life). The last number went pretty good, but after 2-3 weeks with texting and phoning she also went cold when we couldn't get a date going.(A big part of this was my fault) I went bitter of internetdating and myself and dropped it.
Two days ago I continued when I realized, I have too little time and money at the time going out to clubs(have to get better att his aswell) but being horny as a 14 year old boy.
Thought it was time for a new tactic, was no fun using the old line since it is just all about following a script.(Which obviously has been working for me) But wanted to improve my game, and actually game the girls by myself and not a script gaming them.
This time I just use other guys openers and then freestyle, wow it is hard!
I have been using several openers and I get pretty decent amount of replies, like 50-60%.
The thing is the conversation dies after 2-3 messages, after chatting with almost 15-20 girls, only one is still on and did not go cold after 3 messages. And the sad part is, I gamed her using the "I married you in my dreams"-script when I got fed up with all these cold chicks.
But over to my game, I will post a few logs so you can help me find out what the fark I am doing wrong....

First: HB 7.5 age 18
Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 23:14
i couldnt help but notice that you remind me of my ex gf.
she was a good cook but had no sense of humor
ah now i remember why we broke up...............
thanks for bringing back bad memories
ps. if you could get "mr.rights" heart with a dish, which dish would you cook?

Her— 00:01
I can only imagine how many chicks you have sent this one to. There is only one dish and it is tacos. I completely love tacos hehe.

Me — 00:17
Wait, I have to count first. I believe you are the 31th I have sent this one to. 31th is my birthday you know!

Her— 00:18
dork..

Me — 00:18
If you mean "funny" by dork I am a dork!

Her— 00:19
You are soooo funny! I am laying down the floor and shaking from all the laughter.

Me— 00:21
No, not the floor. It is dirty, get in a chair instead!

Her— 00:24
Sir yes sir

Me— 00:25
That is much better, brush off all the dust and if you have to laugh more, please do!

Her— 00:29
Tss (do not how to translate this sound)

Me— 00:30
I am a bit curious though, why tacos of all dishes..."

And that's the first one, now when I read it I can tell some wrongs.
My list of wrongs:
1. She did only mention the "line" and then continued, I should've just ignored it.
2. Shouldn't mentioned my birthday, came out too needy.
3. And after my "semisave" when she said "sir yes sir", she obviously opened up for me to continue, and I fell in to the old pattern which was a bit negative.
4. Should've just went for the dish right away and when told her I was curious my game was lost.

Input? What should I have done here?

Second: HB 8, age 18

Me— torsdag, 22 november 2012 21:45
i couldnt help but notice that you remind me of my ex gf.
she was a good cook but had no sense of humor
ah now i remember why we broke up...............
thanks for bringing back bad memories
ps. if you could get "mr.rights" heart with a dish, which dish would you cook?

Her— torsdag, 22 november 2012 21:49
Haha, I am sorry! I can tell you that meatballs with pasta is the best I can offer, if I can't just heat something up. And I am humoristic! It says you live longer if you laugh a lot, then I am probably immortal.

Me— torsdag, 22 november 2012 21:51
Please do not remind me of her again... Laughter huh? You are suddenly a lot less like my ex.
Meatballs and pasta? You looked like you were a great cook, your meatballs has to kick ass if Mr will have you.

Her— torsdag, 22 november 2012 21:55
Hahaha, I feel the pressure!!

Me— torsdag, 22 november 2012 21:59
We have something unique you and me, we like to laugh. So... Tell me a story!

Her— torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:00
Haha, I am not the funny one! I am the one who laughs at everything. But some people laughs at my humourus laughter, so I am probably a bit funny.

Me— torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:02
I believe you sound like a donkey!

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:07
Haha, my laughter is really noisy!

Me— torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:08
Puh, thanks for telling me, then I know to avoid your salon at the cinema!

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:09
Yeah, exactly
(from here on it goes cold, and do not know how to proceed)

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:15
I'd guess you are a star wars fan!

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:18
Exactly!

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:19
You little liar!

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:20
I love like all movies, seriously!

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:25
The first girl in the world I have talked to who like Star wars, have you seen them all?

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:28
Haha, I have but it was a while back.

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:32
Let me hear your favorite film.

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:34
But... There are so many!

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 22:55
Name your top 3 list, pornos are not allowed!

This convo is not totally dead... She went offline between her last and mine, but I am doubting she will reply tomorrow...
So what did I do wrong?
My own thoughts:
1. Telling her not to remind me of my ex, a bit harsh this early on. She is already playing along...
2. Going pretty smooth until after the donkey, she tells me people laughs at here laugh, her laughter is her weak point. Shouldn't stomped on it, so damn stupid using the cinema sh1t. She obviously got hurt...
Any comments? This is the best chat I had this day... And I suck! Input on this one, please!

Third: HB 7,5, 23 years old (perfect body!) Short one!

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 17:49
You should reconcider your profile picture!

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 17:52
Why?

Me— torsdag, 22 november 2012 18:04
You are lying down...

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 19:04
Haha, I know that?

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 19:09
I am not sure about that though, you are hiding something!

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 19:12
I have a lot of ghosts in my closet, but they are unknown for others...

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 19:13
Is that so? I happen to know the name of one of your ghosts, his name is Casper and loves to hunt! You have to get better trying hiding stuff from me.

Her — torsdag, 22 november 2012 19:19
... It was just one of many ghosts!!! You do not scare me.

Me — torsdag, 22 november 2012 19:25
But you are scaring me know, only thought there would be two ghosts.

And there the convo ended, she saw the last message but didn't reply.
My own thoughts:
1. I can only tell from her last message that I had to change subject and go for a new topic. Didn't know how to do that, she was pretty on all the way until she got bored of me...

Input, tips, tricks? What is my most common mistake? What do I do wrong? Did I do anything good?

I became so fed with some of this so I deleted old convos, stupid of me since I learned a lot only typing 3 convos here. Probably learned some more since it is translated from swedish to english.