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Thread: POF Profile critique please

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    Default POF Profile critique please

    Howdy y'all! I'd be much obliged if you gave me your thoughts and feelings about my profile. I can't post the photos, but I've been told I have a great variety.

    Header: "He's dope on a rope" - Chuck Norris

    About me: Here I sit at the computer, puzzled at the lack of ability for words to describe a person like me. But I'll do my best.

    I aspire to be the first American to ever kill a Chupacabra and make a menu item out of it. Bacon cheese Chupaburger. Think of the millions that will generate! Then I would live on one of those houses on stilts in the surf on a Tahiti beach. Of course until a posse of bully sharks starts making fun of us and calling us names like "shark-bait" and "juicy limbs". That would ruin my fun, so I would fly back to the USA where we have American values. 'Merica!

    Okay, enough horseplay. My favorite bands are Skrillex, Incubus, Macklemore, Tupac, David Guetta, and some Flo Rida. I've been trying to get into country, but it's slow going. I am going to school to become an accountant. I want to be behind the scenes watching what makes a business successful or unsuccessful, and be a part of a team that makes them succeed.

    I like to watch South Park, Family Guy, The Simpsons (only the old episodes though), Trailer Park Boys, and Futurama. I don't play video games unless I'm at my buddies' house.

    I like a girl that loves to flirt and tease and roll her eyes and give me as much of a hard time as I might give her. That way, it doesn't matter if we're at a coffee shop or watching a movie at home: we will have fun and not take life too seriously. I love hair and perfume. I'm a sucker for shorter hair, but if you have long hair I won't count you out. I also admire a girl that isn't afraid to hit the gym and keep herself in good shape. But that's not the most important thing to me, it's just an added bonus.

    First Date: If at a coffee shop, it must be a combination you have never tried before. Like passion fruit white chocolate. If we're playing pool, I may or may not smack your cue during your turn. If you wear a scrunchy on your wrist, there is a 99% chance that I will pull it and let it go *snap*.

    If I find out you lived in Idaho during any portion of your life, prepare to be made fun of. If I find out that you don't like Top Gun, prepare to have your wrist slapped. If you have ever had water with your cereal because you ran out of milk, know that it will never work out between us.

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    Default Re: POF Profile critique please

    In all honesty, these types of profiles are becoming too regular.
    Girls are starting to see these same "try hard" humorous attempts all the time now.

    This whole profile theme is pretty stale.

    The concept of "being more interesting" is spot on though!
    You just need to find a way to be more original & genuine.


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    Default Re: POF Profile critique please

    Instead, of saying "I'm an accountant" I would change it too, "I am the godzilla of numbers instead". Or whatever else might give a hint but not be so direct. I never outrightly tell someone what I do/study in school until they have earned it. The first thing that usually pops into a womans head is "ooooh, so you make lots of money...." - its so lame on their part.

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    Default Re: POF Profile critique please

    Dude, I don't know. The Chuck Norris thing is REALLY played out. How about a cool quote from a song you like? I like the band Metric so I have a quote from the first song I heard of theirs...no girl's ever recognized it but Chuck Norris just seems like it's cheesy and trying too hard. Put your favorite TV shows under "Interests" instead...no one's going to read that long-ass paragraph to comment about your favorite TV shows if a girl msgs you first. And like T-Mal said, this whole style is getting too common. It might work for you but lately, I've had way more success with a really honest, concise profile, the gist of which is "I'm a broke stoner with some issues so you should be a stoner with some issues too. I'm on the right track to getting a degree. You should msg me if..." I know that goes against the conventional wisdom but the game does seem to be shifting. My only photo is of my muscles from the back though so that could help. Not because I'm that big (I'm not) but it's mysterious and black&white so I think Instagram girls get off on that.

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    Default Re: POF Profile critique please

    Honestly, i would make it much more concise and to the point. When flipping through users, i doubt they read the whole thing. Try to be funny, fun, and interesting in less than a paragraph

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    Default Re: POF Profile critique please

    If i were you. I'd write

    Hello, Do you Like Tapes and CD's?

    How about I tape my dick to your forehead and CD's Balls..

    I joke

    You have the right idea on interesting, but you seem like a try hard. Just be natural about it and delete half the stuff.

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    Default Re: POF Profile critique please

    everything you say makes you come off as the nice guy / gay friend type. "Im gonna snap your scrunchy!" Im suchhh a bad ass.
    Try disqualifying yourself like urban cowboy instead of trying to make yourself sound fun.
    good luck

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    Quote Originally Posted by Siedways View Post
    everything you say makes you come off as the nice guy / gay friend type. "Im gonna snap your scrunchy!" Im suchhh a bad ass.
    Try disqualifying yourself like urban cowboy instead of trying to make yourself sound fun.
    good luck
    I like this guy^. I actually didn't even write it with any normal intentions in mind at all...I was just tired of meeting girl who didn't share my interests. But yeah, let's go with what you said lol.


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