Re: POF question
Alright I'm going to attempt this. Sounds like a fun game...
Potential Girl 1: I don't know why you'd even bother. I don't really know what to say either. She seems like a retard. First date has an entry from her personal journal about a first date that she just had. LOLWUT?
My response would be: Your profile is so full of love that I really didn't expect screamo in there lol. Does that mean you're going to respond to me in CAPITAL LETTERS? :P (I am conveying the image that she WILL respond to me, but humorously asking if it will be in caps. dhv, look up that term) /response
Potential Girl 2: Sounds like there are some emotional issues packed up in her suitcase.
Your proposed response is way too cocky. You have to tone it down online. Ever message someone you were joking to and they thought you were actually serious? Online is hard to convey sarcasm or jokes. It's a fine art you can master, but it takes time.
My response would be: You want to be a photographer? You seem more like that type that would prefer to be in pictures! (Playing on her don't judge me bullsh1t, somewhat flirty) + Do you like photos of people or scenery better?
or something like:
Hey, I hear you're looking for someone to "fight for you and protect you". Originally I was looking for a cool girl, but a job in security sounds pretty sweet too. How much does it pay? (Funny, cocky in a sort of "I'm powerful enough to guard you" kinda way) /response
Potential Girl 3: "After a long debate I decided that even though your profile is horrible...". No, just no. I like your style, but it's too early for this sort of humour! That's just cocky without the funny lol. This is something I struggled with a lot in the beginning. I don't want to crush your line though. It just needs tweaking.
My response would be: After a long debate I decided that even though you like guns, you seem interesting and might not shoot me on our first date. Let me guess, are you trying to become a cop? /response
This is the kind of funny you want. You'd also be mentioning that she SEEMS interesting. Not giving it to her on a platter like "You're so interesting!", but still tastefully implying that you'd like to know more.
Your grammar is a bit off. Let me rewrite what you originally wrote for this one:
"After a long debate, I decided that even though your profile is horrible [deleted] you SEEM like an interesting person SO decided TO message you anyways. Hi, I'm Brandon. (INSERT QUESTION HERE)"
You must ask a question! Peak her interest and get her gears moving. Consider my "Are you trying to become a cop" question, or anything else you want to keep moving with!
The reason I rewrote your message is because it's all about efficiency. Sometimes I'm so excited to talk to a girl that I make the message a little too long. Rather than delete stuff I want to keep, I chang things like "Hi my name is Brandon", to "Hi, I'm Brandon". You can make your messages a bit smaller and still pack the same punch. That shows intelligence.
Hope this helped you man, have fun!
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