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    CashFrags is offline Aspiring PUA
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    Default Crafting a good profile and opening response.

    So i joined Pof on a whim and put pretty much no work into my profile and a month later after sending maybe a hundred messages I've only gotten one response and one message sent to me both were 9's (suprisingly) however once i responded i never got an answer back.

    So after joining this forum i read through some posts and the consensus seems to be you need to have a legit profile/opener let alone responses to even seal a date.

    So i took a look back at my profile (i literally hadn't seen it since i made it).

    Interests

    music dancing gaming


    About Me
    Hey I'm Cassius i'm 19 years old and aspiring to be a heavy machine operator i'm a nice and responsible guy with a great sense of humor I workout and am in shape and I love to explore the city and I love to dance.

    First Date
    For me I love to keep first dates casual and fun and i love to get to know a person so talking is the primary focus so coffee dates or restaurant dates work the best.

    That's pretty bleak.

    And my openers were along the lines of , "Hey there cutie how's it going?"


    So i figured i'd try to totally Overhaul everything.

    However i'm not the most creative person so i could use some help here.

    so i'm pretty much looking to build a legit relationship to keep me occupied as most of my mates have gotten into serious relationships and don't like to do sh1t all but chill with their girls or game with me.

    As for openers I'm pretty clueless here i'll need you guys help to the fullest.

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    HunterKiller is offline PUA in Training
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    Default Re: Crafting a good profile and opening response.

    Bleak is right but you're on the right track for recognizing that. XD

    As far as interests go, music is pretty generic. Gaming isn't going to win you any brownie points. Dancing is good. Remember you want to list the things that set you apart from your AFC.

    Nice; responsible; good sense of humour: These are all also pretty generic. Especially stay away from nice. The working out/in shape you can show with pics. Exploring the city (do you mean flâner or urban exploration?) and, again, dancing are good angles. Maybe list some of your favourite places to go, and what makes them appealing. Never underestimate the power of good syntax.

    Your line, "[I]'m pretty much looking to build a legit relationship" is pretty good. I'd leave out the bit about needing one as filler for when your buddies aren't around.

    As for your opener, personally, if someone called me cutie in the first line I probably wouldn't respond. I'm not too familiar with dating site etiquette, but I'd probably go with something to the effect of,
    "Hey, I was looking at your profile and you seem pretty cool. I see you like [common interest from something in their profile]. [Opinion about common interest].

    I'd like to get to know you better. Maybe we could chat sometime? Let me know what you think."
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    sidewinder89 is offline PUA Forums Respected Contributor
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    Default Re: Crafting a good profile and opening response.

    Ok there's quite a few obvious points here:

    Your opener is very dull and it is complimenting appearance. Never compliment appearance, every AFC does that.

    your profile is also a little dull. You need to make it interesting and add a bit of verve to it. The key is to leave little bits of information dangling that people can latch onto. You want to be a puzzle for them to solve not an open book.

    Ditch generic clichés such as "I'm a nice guy with a great sense of humor". Don't say that, show it by writing something edgy or funny.

    Read this: http://www.puaforums.com/how-text-gi...nal-bible.html

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    CashFrags is offline Aspiring PUA
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    Default Re: Crafting a good profile and opening response.

    To sum myself up in a paragraph I'm currently 19, Going to be going to school for welding in the next couple months, I love everything to do with Electronic Dance Music, I'm a huge gamer that's probably not a great plus for a dating site but it doesn't interfere with my social life so don’t worry about that, I used to want to do stand-up comedy and practiced all kinds of routines and different accents so I can do all sorts of them and I can pretty much make anyone laugh their hardest, I'm a swimmer and I exercise frequently, I’m friendly and I love to converse so drop me a line sometime!

    Ok reworked it how's this sound? am i giving to much information?


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