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    Default Critique my POF online profile

    Right now I don't have a picture on mine but I probably wouldn't post it here anyway. Ok so here's most of my profile on POF(plenty of fish):


    Headline(title): Grab me soon. Only one left in stock!


    Intent: wants to date but nothing serious

    Personality: Adventurer

    Ethnicity: Caucasion Capricorn with no hair (this is not true since I am an Aries and not Capricorn but they won't let me change it(another reason I'm not a big fan of this site).

    Education: Bachelors

    Profession: Computers (close enough.Lol)

    Longest relationship: over three years (not technically true but I didn't want to keep it as under one year since that doesn't sound good. I did have an online relationship with a woman I never met in person that lasted probably over three years and we did talk on the phone so close enough. Lol)

    Interests: music, outdoors, fun, excitement, sex


    About me: ( I admit this will need a lot of tweaking especially since it's not about me. LOL)

    You can send me a message if you want as long as you are a fun and cool person but I can't guarantee anything will come out of it or that I will even get back to you.

    I am on here looking for someone to spend some quality time with. I would like to meet a good, down to earth, high quality woman who is honest, sincere, fun and intelligent. You should be independent, happy, emotionally stable and willing to be yourself and genuine. I'm not interested in games unless they are consensual.


    I'm not interested in you if:

    you refer to people as "weird," "strange" "losers" or any other negative terms.

    You flick cigarette butts out of your car window.

    You say the word "aint" or other improper grammar. I'm not mr. English professor and don't always speak perfect but I think some words are just annoying and sound bad.

    You have a potty mouth. Swearing once in a while is ok especially if you are angry but some people over do it.

    You think you are better than other people

    You refer to yourself as "attractive." To me this is unattractive. THen again I like a very modest and humble kind of woman.

    You think you are a princess and expect a man to spoil you even though you barely know him.


    Everything else is pretty much fair game


    First Date

    It depends on what we agree on. Hopefully something where we can get to know each other a bit better like nude sunbathing or skinny dipping. Meeting for a cup of coffee or tea or whatever is usually a safe bet too. I am flexible even though I suck at yoga.


    Ok, please tell me what you think can stay and what you think should go. I like about maybe 1/3 of it including my title and first date. The about me section admittedly sucks though.

    Please give me your honest opinion without making personal attacks or insults directed at me. Thanks.

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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    I think the strongest part is the "First Date". Delete the entire "I'm not interested in you if:"

    Tighten up the "About me". Keep it about as long as it is now. Have cool pics.

    It's a numbers game. Send messages out, keep then short. Go online and find some online dating openers.

    I've been on POF a lot the past week, and have gotten about 5 numbers. Been doing some text game. No F2F yet.

    Cheers.

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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    You're profile says absolutely nothing about you and only says what you want in a woman. You have given potential messagers nothing to talk to you about. IMO you have to redo the whole thing if you want positive results.
    "It's only after we've lost everything that we're free to do anything."

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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    Thanks. I plan on keeping the title also but I agree the about me has got to go.

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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    As for the first date section, delete "It depends on what we agree on. Hopefully," and change it to:

    "Somewhere we can get to know each other a bit better like nude sunbathing or skinny dipping. Meeting for a cup of coffee or tea or whatever is usually a safe bet too. I am flexible even though I suck at yoga."

    That removes a lot of the beta language.
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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    Ok, I changed it. I was thinking about adding something like "something where I can see if I like you" or "see if you impress me" but that might be a bit too much and the woman would think I was full of myself.

    Anyway, I have a few questions. Should I send messages to women if the woman says not to send a message to her if you are looking for "intimate encounter," "intimate encounters or sex" or "other relationship?" Also, should I say something about not paying for her or specifics of dates. Also, is there a way to find women on here who are not looking for anything serious. Finally, should I change my "wants to date but nothing serious" to something like "friends" or LTR and should I only message women who are looking for "wants to date but nothing serious" etc. Thanks.

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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    Your first date stuff is cutesy and a little naughty. Do you think that sort of sexual innuendo will attract women? Do you think it might only attract certain types of women?

    I had a specific target in mind when I wrote my First Date shtick. My targets are hopeless romantics, women that want to be treated as princesses, women into romance novels.

    I took a realistic approach and combined several dates into one from starting the day w/coffee and a stroll to ending it w/a fark! I avoided direct innuendos, but provoked her imagination w/scenery and situations.

    Define your target and write what you know will attract them.
    Carpe diem!

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    Default Re: Critique my POF online profile

    Also add more to your interests list. What you write on there is used to sort your matches. The more stuff you add, the more matches you'll get with similar interests.

    Duke gave you some good advise on the About Me section and I agree. Leave the "what and what not" she should be out. Save that meat for the chatting and texting.

    Avoid the "Whole Truth" syndrome. Let women try to peel you like an onion to find out who you are.
    Carpe diem!


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