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    lavas is offline PUA in Training
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    Default hey can I get a critique here

    http://www.okcupid.com/profile/laves...sts?cf=profile

    Well that's my profile let's her some harsh hard critiques so I can ake some adjustments. Please and thank you.

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    Default Re: hey can I get a critique here

    Get rid of your first three pictures. They are intimidating and add nothing. They make you look like a rapist tbh.

    Cut all of this:

    "I don't like things that are safe and easy I think that's boring. I'm trying to get out and do some traveling. I think that couch surfing is an awesome idea."

    Re-write the entire "I'm really good at" section. Don't mention the ukulele or drawing there since you've already mentioned it above. Generally, I think you should put something playful and something serious in this section.

    Your entire first thing people notice section reeks of confidence issues. We all see you have glasses, you don't need to put that. Find something unique, maybe ask a friend. If you want to stick with a gritty sense of humor, say that and then try to show it a bit. But don't say "I get laughs sometimes." That just sounds sad.

    Again, your spends a lot of time thinking about sounds sad and longing. It sounds like you do a lot of thinking about things but you never do much of doing those things.

    This quote, "Either hanging out with my friends at their place or kicking back at home. I'd like to get out more since I've become such a bore since leaving San Diego. " is definitely something that girls are NOT going to love. Why would anyone want to hangout with a bore?

    You have a long ways to go with this. You're going to have to revamp the whole thing. Basically start from scratch and be positive about yourself.
    "It's only after we've lost everything that we're free to do anything."

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    lavas is offline PUA in Training
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    Default Re: hey can I get a critique here

    Hey thx for the input. But rapist? come on man.

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    Default Re: hey can I get a critique here

    Ok I revamped it if anyone wants to give it another review.

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    Default Re: hey can I get a critique here

    What I will add is, you want your profile pic to be eye catching. SMILE, look sharp, be doing something fun, on a boat, jet ski, with a group of friends.

    Ideally, you want an online profile that will get girls to contact you. Then you know there is already a level of interest.

    If you send a message try this. Read the girls bio, find something she says she likes, maybe baking.

    Send this "Baking? LOL...Your such a girl"

    It is quick, and easy, and it will get her attention and she will check out your profile.

    I didn't make up that line. I may have seen it on here, but I did see it online somewhere. It works dude. Before that I would be sending messages with NO response.

    I would get responses, and start chatting. I got a few numbers and texted, but they all eventually fizzled out.

    But try it. Let me know how it goes.

    Remember SMILE in your profile pic, like your laughing having a great time.


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