You want to make your texts stand out. You want them to make the girl feel something. You've been using all of the excellent guides here that T-Mal, GnG, and Hightower (you guys rock, paper, and scissor) wrote, but you aren't getting the responses you expect. So what's left to do? Change your writing style!

Since a large part of text game involves making your texts short and to the point, it can be pretty tough to get your message across. So here's something I learned in ROTC and decidied to apply it to game:
Most of us probably use something called passive voice. Passive voice sounds something like this:

"You were swimming in the kiddie pool, ya wuss "
"You were screaming like a little girl when the monster popped out! "
I was laughing so hard when you couldn't use the chopsticks! "


Now, there's nothing wrong with passive voice, but what happens when you change it to active voice?

"You swam in the kiddie pool, ya wuss "
"You screamed like a little girl when the monster popped out! "
"I laughed so hard when when you couldn't use the chopsticks! "


The difference is subtle, but you use less words. Also, active voice makes your sentences more dramatic direct. You get message across much faster and it's easier to read.

How do you know if you're using passive voice? It's really simple. Passive voice is NOT using a verb in the past tense; it's using the verb "to be" AND a past tense verb. Active voice drops the verb "to be."

Again, nothing wrong with passive voice, but changing to active voice will add a freshness to your texts. Let me know how this works out