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Thread: New profile, feed back appreciated!

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    Default New profile, feed back appreciated!

    So I decided to get back into the online thing a little bit, I gave it up for the most part when a girl I met on there was pretty f'ing crazy, hoping thats not the norm lol. So how does my profile look? I know my pictures arent the greatest, but I have no good pictures really. I need to get some better pictures.

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    Default Re: New profile, feed back appreciated!

    Hey man, good first crack at a profile. They are always hard to write and I am constantly revising mine. Here are my initial impressions, or at least my guess as how it might be perceived to the women:

    My self-summary
    I am a professional bear wrestler, avid lover and protector of puppies, pool shark, and a world class snowboarding connoisseur.

    Not bad, but just doesn't have “it”. I'll think on this one.

    What I’m doing with my life
    Saving the world while also solving the mysteries of quantum mechanics and the universe

    Are you really studying quantum mechanics? If so, mention that, it's pretty unique. If it's not, then you aren't really telling the ladies what you do. Only jokes will only so so far. Also, the “saving the world” might be a little over used these days. You can use this area to talk about your job, career goals, life aspirations, etc. Women want quality dudes, show them you are one of them.

    I’m really good at
    Living vicariously through myself.

    Ha, I like that, good answer. But maybe throw some real world stuff in after.

    The first things people usually notice about me
    That I look exactly like Channing Tatum, except that I am shorter, less muscular, and my face is completely different.

    Try to avoid negative things about you, the shorter and less muscular part should go. The face line could be tweaked to be more positive, but I found it kind of funny.

    Favorite books, movies, shows, music, and food
    Pizza, beer and Zack Brown Band are really really good.

    Not bad, but this section probably isn't the most important one. You can always keep tweaking this one.


    The six things I could never do without
    family, coffee, adventure, traveling, mountains, and more coffee

    Women like family, adventure and holy crap every girl says they love to travel, so I guess you're good there. The coffee a second time was a good twist.

    I spend a lot of time thinking about
    does that tree falling in the woods with no one around really make a sound?

    Eh, cliché? Over used? I think you can do better with this. This section is an area you can really pull out some deep and meaningful s*** that connect with women on an emotional level.

    On a typical Friday night I am
    mastering the art of having a good time while narrowly staying out of trouble.

    The most private thing I’m willing to admit
    That I may or may not sing really passionately in the car when on long drives by myself.

    I guess this works. Maybe throw in a line about being a sucker for a particular female artist or something.

    You should message me if
    you are fun and you think you have a chance.

    You could stick with this line if you had an outstanding profile, but I think you can do better. As it is now, it comes across as a little arrogant or trying to hard. How about saying they should “message you if they are fun, confident and not afraid to be a little flirty”.. something fun not confrontational.

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    Default Re: New profile, feed back appreciated!

    I would make one major change and instead of answering all of the sections with one or two sentences, instead take some of the sections out and answer a few with more detail, make sure to add actual stuff about yourself, not just funny quips, as well.

    With the way it is now I just scan through it and don't really focus on anything in particular. It's not bad just...not noticeable. Your profile is your advertisement of yourself. It needs to pop. Preferably in a good way.

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    Default Re: New profile, feed back appreciated!

    Thanks for the feedback guys! I will definitely make a few tweaks. I think its a decent start, but it could definitely be better. Haven't had much luck so far though lol.

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    Default Re: New profile, feed back appreciated!

    It sounds like you're trying too hard to be funny, and not giving enough genuine insight about yourself.

    You DON'T want to be generic & say crap like "I'm a laid back guy who enjoys sports & hanging with my friends... etc." or just talk about your interests... but you DO want to convey some real stuff about yourself in an original way.

    The pictures were actually great.
    Get creative in your written section so that it ties in with your photos.



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    Default Re: New profile, feed back appreciated!

    Your main image is no good because when girls are looking through guys pics they aren't able to see you. Make your head shot the main image.

    You're being too funny/silly in your profile. Add some substance and actual things about you.

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    Default Re: New profile, feed back appreciated!

    Thanks for the feed back guys! Thanks T-Mal for the reassurance for the pictures, I thought they were the weak point of my profile, I have pretty much no useful pictures of myself unfortunately. I am not a very photogenic person typically lol.


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