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    Mystik is offline PUA Forums Respected Contributor
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    Default Imaginary profile

    I would like others on here to critique this imaginary profile. Please understand I know this is a bad profile and I would not use something like this. I might use some of it but not all of it. I would simply like to know why this is bad and why something like this would not be very good.

    [ Cool guy 4 u] or [Tired of game players]

    Hello ladies,

    Just a regular guy here interested in meeting a nice woman. I'm 29(not my real age), tall, good looking and work out at least three times a week. I work hard play hard and am just looking for someone to chill with.

    I want to meet a woman who doesn't play games and is friendly and down to earth. Please get back to me if you are a fun and friendly woman who isn't out to play games and doesn't flake out. Let's start out as friends first and see how things go.




    Ok, again I know this stuff is crap but I would like to know why this stuff doesn't work and exactly what about it turns most women off. Thanks. Also, please suggest a sample profile of something that would work much better than this.

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    Default Re: Imaginary profile

    Quote Originally Posted by Mystik View Post
    I would like others on here to critique this imaginary profile. Please understand I know this is a bad profile and I would not use something like this. I might use some of it but not all of it. I would simply like to know why this is bad and why something like this would not be very good.
    If you write something that you are not happy with, it might be better to read it, then start totally new. In doing so you remember the good qualities about what you wrote prior, and are able to expand on those things.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mystik View Post
    [ Cool guy 4 u] or [Tired of game players]
    This is good to express, but when writing a profile you don't want to start with a negative. Re-wording this to say something like
    I have been disappointment in the past by women who are only seeking fantasies, or to experiment in talking with a quality person so that they might attract them in real life, but have no intention of communicating with me honestly
    In wording your statement this way, you not only express your disappointment with women of low quality, but raise your own in a way that doesn't seem so bitter, but rather that you are disappointed in most women. Women want to be seen as being different from all others, and will strive to be what you are looking for in order to define themselves as being different. Also, instead of saying
    Cool guy 4 u
    because cool is subjective and slang, you might choose a name like
    FunMan4U
    this expresses that you are a Man, not a "guy", as a guy is just a average person while a Man expresses all those qualities we believe a man should be. A guy can be anyone, a man is something special.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mystik View Post
    Hello ladies,
    Instead of saying
    Hello ladies
    you may want to instead say
    To that one special girl I have been spending so much time hoping finds me
    this expresses that you are looking for one girl, not many. Also by using the word "girl" you are expressing that you are taking a more dominant role, which puts you in a position, as a man, to take control of the exchange. Which is exactly where you want to be if you truly desire to influence the outcome of your communication. We often disregard these roles, but there are genetic triggers that pertain exactly to these roles that we should be mindful of.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mystik View Post
    Just a regular guy here interested in meeting a nice woman. I'm 29(not my real age), tall, good looking and work out at least three times a week. I work hard play hard and am just looking for someone to chill with.
    You don't ever want to be
    Just a regular guy
    . As sex is very easy for most women to come by, they are not looking for a regular guy, they are looking for a special guy. Instead of saying
    Just a regular guy
    you would serve your purpose better by saying instead
    I have been told by women in the past that I am a very different and special man, and looking for the right girl to compliment who I am, and I her
    In stating again you are man, and she is a girl, you are taking the dominant role and reinforcing what you have already said. Also, in stating that you have had women in the past say you are different and special, you are not only evoking pre-selection, establishing your worth by stating other women found you worthy, but also stating that for a girl to be with you, will make her a woman.

    Quote Originally Posted by Mystik View Post
    I want to meet a woman who doesn't play games and is friendly and down to earth. Please get back to me if you are a fun and friendly woman who isn't out to play games and doesn't flake out. Let's start out as friends first and see how things go.
    Women want consistency, this usually means that you will not change who you are if involved in a relationship. For example, if you tell a woman that you only want her, then you cheat on her with another woman she will think to herself that you are no longer the man she fell in love with, but have changed and will not want to be with you anymore. If you start your post by saying
    Hello ladies
    then you will want to use the same word to describe who you are looking for, throughout your post. Consistent! Also, it should be implied that a woman does not play games, but girls do. The word "woman" expresses just as in a man, that she possesses specific qualities that make her so. Also, keep the negative to a minimum, and only express it in the middle of your post, it's almost always the very first, and last things in your post that she will remember, or will cause her to respond. The middle just proves you can write and are articulate.

    Also, by expressing that you have had experiences with women that play games, or are flakes, you are really expressing your poor choice in women. Women want a man who will choose her because she's the best choice, it will make her feel special. You need to somehow qualify that the women you have been with were of quality, and that you make good choices when you do so. Stating that the "girls" who have contacted you in the past, when you have posted, seem to play games and that you assume because of this they are flaky would be a better way of expressing this. It makes you sound like a man who makes good choices while also expressing your message without too much negative. You do not want someone who is reading your post to think you are bitter and negative, as if they have a lot to overcome just to prove they are not.

    You might also say that you are willing to take a chance on meeting someone online, if they possess certain qualities that you admire and appreciate. Every woman wants to be admired and appreciated, and seek men capable of doing so. This will add a positive spin, and challenge her to show her best qualities off the bat. You could express those specific qualities if you want, but I would make her ask as it also establishes your control, and another reason for her to respond, to find out what those qualities might be. So you could say something like this. I am interested in women that possess specific qualities, but you will have to ask me what those are if you are interested.
    This will tell me that you really are a girl who believes she is special and allow me to trust you much sooner than I might otherwise.
    The part where you state
    lets start out as friends
    might be very good to keep, but you might say it in such a way that allows for anything to happen, this will also allow her to express feelings past friendship she might be having, but feel awkward stating if you say with certainty that you want to start out as friends. So you may want to express this by saying something like
    if we start out as friends first, that would be great, or if we really have a connection we can become friends while we learn more about each other, and even if we only are friends I would be okay with that as I like to surround myself with good people, but I do believe being friends is very important.
    This lets her know that you will want to do things, as friends also. One of the most common complaints women have being in a relationship with a man is that he spends too much time with his friends. Not with their friends, but with his. This is because women truly want to be friends, and if you are in a relationship like this, it is far better with more depth than not. Also it lets her know that you pay attention to the people who are your friends, and that you like good people. Women are always concerned that a man's friends will turn them away from her, but if your friends are good, this implies they will not.


    Quote Originally Posted by Mystik View Post
    Ok, again I know this stuff is crap but I would like to know why this stuff doesn't work and exactly what about it turns most women off. Thanks. Also, please suggest a sample profile of something that would work much better than this.
    It's not crap, but it does need a lot of work. Start positive, end positive, minimize the negative as much as possible and try to include a positive spin. Set yourself up in the dominant position and pay attention to how she responds. If she is not combative, you have the lead, if you do not have the lead figure out how to do so. In taking the lead, you have control over the exchange which puts you in a positive position to dynamically change your responses so that she will read and understand them. If she takes the dominant lead, then she will naturally be more combative as she will try to challenge you to prove yourself.

    C...

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    Default Re: Imaginary profile

    It doesn't work because what you wrote is what every other guy writes. There is nothing there that is different and stands out from the pack that will peak a girls interest in contacting you. Every guy doing online dating needs to take some time & anonymously browse other guys' profiles, so they can see how horrible and lame they are. Most of the guys write that they're "laid back" & they "work hard, play hard".. or they're "just a regular, normal guy", or that they want to meet a girl who is friendly and "down to earth".

    They talk about how they have a good job, the sports they like , that they work out ...... yada, yada, yada,


    Think of how many GIRLS all write the same shit when YOU are browsing their profiles. It gets old pretty fast , doesn't it...?
    It's the same principle when it comes to your profile ...... be different !!!!
    "The purpose of our lives is to be happy" - his Holiness the Dalai Llama of Tibet

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    Default Re: Imaginary profile

    Quote Originally Posted by drgnsfire12 View Post
    It doesn't work because what you wrote is what every other guy writes. There is nothing there that is different and stands out from the pack that will peak a girls interest in contacting you. Every guy doing online dating needs to take some time & anonymously browse other guys' profiles, so they can see how horrible and lame they are. Most of the guys write that they're "laid back" & they "work hard, play hard".. or they're "just a regular, normal guy", or that they want to meet a girl who is friendly and "down to earth".

    They talk about how they have a good job, the sports they like , that they work out ...... yada, yada, yada,


    Think of how many GIRLS all write the same shit when YOU are browsing their profiles. It gets old pretty fast , doesn't it...?
    It's the same principle when it comes to your profile ...... be different !!!!
    Yes, I understand all that. However, could you give a sample profile of something that does work. What would be an example of being different that would get women interested.

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    Default Re: Imaginary profile

    Hey, I have some advice. I use ok cupid and I have random girls liking my profile and even one messaging me about what I wrote there!

    1. Don't be so serious, be playful and risky
    2. Use humor!
    3. Put a bunch of personality into your about me section.

    These are examples of lines I use;.

    " I like working out, hanging out and eating out..... at restaurants"

    "Im half black and half Krptonian"

    " Im passionate about being a gynecologist, cause thats what I think about when I see women"

    Girls love this!
    It makes you stand out and it shows your not an ass kisser.

    Never say what your suppose to say.

    One girl even told me ," interesting technique, how many girls am i competing with? You got game."

    Say something like this instead, " im not nice, but i have friends that have friends that are nice."

    Good luck.


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