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    Default Online Profile

    I recently updated my online profile (it was previously blank), curious of your thoughts/input.

    My self-summaryedit essay

    Oh, hello there, I didn't see you come in, please have a seat.

    My name is Tom and you are either reading this because you have amazing taste or I have sent you an irresistible message that implored you to learn more about my awesome self. (You will not be disappointment)

    I was born on a dreary April evening, the sky opened and the rain fell from the sky like meteors crashing violently into the Earth-

    I feel I'm getting off topic. (Squirrel!)

    Long walks on the beach get sand in between my toes, which can be quite annoying.. Candle lit dinners make it hard for me to see my food and wine is like juice boxes for adults.

    I prefer to slay dragons and randomly break dance in public over salsa dancing. Often times I can be found randomly walking through the woods with my handsome dog Charlie.

    I could be stuck in a paper bag and have the time of my life, fun is a mind state!


    What Iím doing with my lifeedit essay

    School, work, and finding fun in the little moments


    Iím really good atedit essay

    Playing with Lego's


    Favorite books, movies, shows, music, and foodedit essay

    PIZZA


    The six things I could never do withoutedit essay

    carbohydrates, protein, fat, vitamins, minerals and water.


    I spend a lot of time thinking aboutedit essay

    What it would look like if a dog and a turtle had a baby


    You should message me ifedit essay

    Your phone works


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    flyguyinMN is offline PUA in Training
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    Default Re: Online Profile

    I have also been experimenting with a couple copy and paste messages:

    "I'm sure it’s tough to sort through all of the “Hello beautiful” messages you must get on here.

    But let’s just say that someone original who caught your attention popped up in your inbox … What three qualities do you possess that would win him over?" - Has been used as an example in PUA world for a minute.

    "Congratulations !!! You are a winner!!!

    You have been randomly chosen to have the opportunity of a lifetime! An experience that most never get a chance to discover. Through a series of conversations and Tension filled coffee dates you get the privilege of meeting me!

    Please give me 2 reasons why you feel you should be able to receive such an honor?

    Congrats again!

    Tom"



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    Default Re: Online Profile

    Quote Originally Posted by flyguyinMN View Post
    I recently updated my online profile (it was previously blank), curious of your thoughts/input.

    My self-summaryedit essay

    Oh, hello there, I didn't see you come in, please have a seat.

    My name is Tom and you are either reading this because you have amazing taste or I have sent you an irresistible message that implored you to learn more about my awesome self. (You will not be disappointment)

    I was born on a dreary April evening, the sky opened and the rain fell from the sky like meteors crashing violently into the Earth-

    I feel I'm getting off topic. (Squirrel!)

    Long walks on the beach get sand in between my toes, which can be quite annoying.. Candle lit dinners make it hard for me to see my food and wine is like juice boxes for adults.

    I prefer to slay dragons and randomly break dance in public over salsa dancing. Often times I can be found randomly walking through the woods with my handsome dog Charlie.

    I could be stuck in a paper bag and have the time of my life, fun is a mind state!


    First up... you've gotta have a better first line.

    While it is decent, you want to aim way higher than decent.

    Go for something truly creative, more eye-catching. Instead of "Oh, hello there, I didn't see you come in, please have a seat", consider something like... "Every day, I work towards my dream life by creating magic."

    There is no need to do the whole "I am gonna introduce myself now". Be more willing to just plunge into the deep end and come up with something completely different (from what others do), and start from there.

    Don't bother with the "My name is Tom, and you are either reading this because...". The truth is, nobody wants to know your name. Yet. There are too many profiles out there to read, and you will have to show very fast -- both through your photos and descriptions -- that you aren't like the rest of the men out there with their very ordinary online presence.

    Bearing that in mind, I would change everything written above. Simply because it's pretty obvious that you are saying nothing with your profile. There is nothing in there that shows her who you are. Read carefully... your profile is full of one-liners. Some of it are funny, no doubt. But you stack too many of them, and that tells the woman you are either trying too hard, or just being lame.

    Keep it simple. You are in the right direction by using humor. You just need to remove the one-liners, have a proper fancy description about yourself, incorporate bits and pieces of humor, and you will be fine.

    Also, focus on showing, not telling. Showing means instead of using words like "passionate" or "spontaneous", you describe what that means for you in pictures about yourself. It could be something as simple as, "The world is a playground, and I am determined to live it out as best as I can".




    What I’m doing with my lifeedit essay

    School, work, and finding fun in the little moments

    I’m really good atedit essay

    Playing with Lego's

    Favorite books, movies, shows, music, and foodedit essay

    PIZZA

    The six things I could never do withoutedit essay

    carbohydrates, protein, fat, vitamins, minerals and water.

    I spend a lot of time thinking aboutedit essay

    What it would look like if a dog and a turtle had a baby
    Don't ever do one-liners in all these separate sections. Simply because they do nothing for you.

    There is nothing attractive about "carbohydrates, protein, fat, etc". In fact, it's neither funny nor witty.

    Don't waste your time if you can't come up with anything for some of them. Leave it empty. Focus on the important sections, like "What I'm doing with my life". That bit is important to people.


    You should message me ifedit essay

    Your phone works

    Finally, for this last bit... have more standards. Actually have a list that shows women they can't have you so easy. This is an example of one criteria I put in my own profile:

    You have interesting things to say, so that we can stimulate each other's minds. Just don’t actually crack my skull for that. I do come in peace...
    Notice how I mix it up with something less serious.

    Hope that helps!

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    Default Re: Online Profile

    Quote Originally Posted by flyguyinMN View Post
    I have also been experimenting with a couple copy and paste messages:

    "I'm sure itís tough to sort through all of the ďHello beautifulĒ messages you must get on here.

    But letís just say that someone original who caught your attention popped up in your inbox Ö What three qualities do you possess that would win him over?" - Has been used as an example in PUA world for a minute.

    "Congratulations !!! You are a winner!!!

    You have been randomly chosen to have the opportunity of a lifetime! An experience that most never get a chance to discover. Through a series of conversations and Tension filled coffee dates you get the privilege of meeting me!

    Please give me 2 reasons why you feel you should be able to receive such an honor?
    Congrats again!

    Tom"
    As for messages, avoid the copy and paste ones.

    Women are not stupid. They know what a generic message looks like. Your best bet is to come up with something truly unique, and preferably funny. Being funny is like a cheat code, when used right.

    Here's an example of what I have used before:

    It appears to me that your crown is a lil flimsy. I reckon holding a scepter will give you back the look of authority and power. Might even help you build an army of cats for world domination.
    What did I do right there? I word associated.

    She was wearing a picture of a plastic crown and I thought that looked flimsy to me.

    In my mind, a crown is associated with a queen, which gives me an image of a queen holding a scepter. Thus the first and second line.

    And since she has a picture of 2 of her cats, I just linked both pictures together. Again, a queen can be associated with authority and power, which made me think of world domination.

    Something simple to come up with, yet at the same time, completely different to what she would normally receive from other men. Combine that with good pictures and a solid profile description, and she is sure to reply.

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    Default Re: Online Profile

    Thanks again!!! I implemented some of this already, and its working very well.

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    Default Re: Online Profile

    I read it, First impression I got was that you were trying to hard. If I can pick that up, They will too.

    There is two ways you can go about this:

    1. T'mals way, - His profiles are so interesting, random, hilarious and confident that 4 pages later and you want more, its like that book you never want to end. I've tried and tested it and had multiple women contact me.

    2. My way - I will use short statements, that are Intriguing, Showing Alpha, Intriguing, Entertaining, (the idea that there is something you will miss out on if you don't make the effort to get to know me). I like all my stuff short and efficient. I believe that if a girl has to look through 100's of profiles a day, it has to be quick enough to encourage her to glance, Intriguing enough to take the spot light from other profiles. (Note: T'mals are so goddam interesting that it just takes the spot light). But if I saw Tmals on every guys profile i would get demotivated by the second profile i read in a day. Easy on the eye.

    Everything else between these two will not maximize success in a quantity or quality scenario.
    Men, we need to value our time more then we value women. This isn't to say women are not valuable. But who are we to believe in something so illogical, as men we should realize that without our time(life), we would not even be able to pursue women, but only our mother who gave us life. Why do we think we should prioritize them over our time(life) unless she is the one who gives me/my children life. Man is Sovereignty.


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