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Originally Posted by yesman should i use a better nickname than 'cutie'?
what about the line with stalkerish in it? i dont like it but i need to address it i think in a joking way?
still too long? which line(s) would u take out?
Hi cutie! had a great time sat nt! but i forgot to get your #, too much vodka lol. i told a friend the
funny story of me getting kicked out of the hotel and she gave me the idea to look you up on facebook
since you have a unique first name. seemed kind of stalkerish to me but i figured what the hell, i had
fun and its better than waiting to run into each other at a final table of the wsop!!  plus i owe you a nug!
first time ever using facebook (been living in a cave without internet access), but i have been planning
to create acct anyway because i just started my own real estate biz and networking is essential.
we will have to get together sometime and have some more fun! when big bear mountain opens we should go
snowboarding, then go to one of the casinos they have up there and hustle some poker tables. have you ever played up there? easy money on the wknds im sure!! (i used to be a full time poker pro so bring something to take notes with haha.) |
Nothing wrong with the cutie line, but if you have something more personalized I'd go with the personalization. Stalkerish stuff is fine. Normally I'd say cut that, but it works well the way you have written it. To be perfectly honest, I'd cut everything but the first paragraph. If your married to having some of the rest of it. I'd cut everythin in the last paragraph except the snowboarding stuff. The reason is that the poker stuff kinda comes off as bragging, it presents a second option which only muddies the water, and also looks like you are trying a little desperately to
hook up, and finally, since she's a dealer she is constantly inundated with poker players. No reason to get shoved into whatever stereotype she has of poker players. Besides, you also have a nice little hook about poker in the first paragraph. You can bring the other stuff up later.
If you go for the poker pick-up, you should do it sooner than later (like this next weekend), otherwise she will forget you. From your description, I am guess she gets plenty of action. She's hot, and she was pretty open to a quick physical progression as well as being pretty forward at the start (she basically
opened you when you walked up). Couple all that with her probably being pretty drunk too; the odds of her remembering you in 3-4 weeks are bordering on remote. Yes, it is highly unlikely that you would bump into her by accident, but that's okay. Especially if you play it like you don't remember her very well or at all, to begin with, it will help. Plus after her initial questions and you have rebuilt some attraction, you can make it kind of like an inside joke, that you actually were going there to meet up with her. You just deny it at first. Even if she knows that you deliberately tried to find her, as long as you show the social grace to pretend like that's not the case (thus get out of stalkerville), she won't care.